Hi, thanks for the response! I have a few question on your comments:
(Maybe on an international basis but I wonder how many people speak a form of Chinese.)
I'm not sure what you are saying here. The essay is supposed to be on an international basis, and this data I got on the number of people with English as their first language.
(A language is not a dialect - a dialect is generally localized and is deviant from the mainstream of the language.)
Thanks for reminding me this. I always get them mixed up To fix this one how about I change "dialect" to "language".
(Be careful here. Not all people who speak English speak in the same manner - dialects creep in - consider the Indian version of English, for example.).
I'm again not sure what you're saying here. I'm talking about the English language in general. The Indian version of English would have come after the birth of the language (I would think). Maybe it would help if I changed this to "its Germanic origins"? and "the dialects that are spoken today" to cover all bases.
From your comments I changed to this:
With approximately 300 million speakers and over 600,000 words, the English language has become an international leader in all spoken communications in the modern world. This, however, did not happen overnight. It took many years of simplifications and additions to reach the modern dialects of the language that are spoken today. The English language has been influenced by many cultures and peoples throughout its evolution from its Germanic origins to the dialects that are spoken today.
Thesis in red
Additions in green.
Again, thank you very much for helping me improve my intro.
P.S Do you think it should be longer?
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