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    #1

    Could you proofread these senteces? ^^

    Could you proofread these sentences?

    Thank you

    1. We should avoid Broadway, I heard itís gridlocked.
    2. You know what? JDH Motors is running a good promotion.
    3. Hey, keep your eyes on the road. You ran through the stop sign.
    4. We should take the subway to avoid bad traffic.
    5. Because of the Thanksgiving holiday, traffic is bumper to bumper.
    6. Pardon me, do you know if thereís a subway close to here?
    7. Please fill out your customs declaration form on your own.

    8. The baggage handling system at Charles de Gaulle Airport will be upgraded soon.

    9. Stronger security measures will be implemented until the end of this year.

    10. This tour bus goes through many historic sites in Philadelphia.

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    #2

    Re: Could you proofread these senteces? ^^

    Quote Originally Posted by juliana0403 View Post
    Could you proofread these sentences?

    Thank you

    1. We should avoid Broadway, I heard itís gridlocked.
    2. You know what? JDH Motors is running a good promotion.
    3. Hey, keep your eyes on the road. You ran through the stop sign.
    4. We should take the subway to avoid bad traffic.
    5. Because of the Thanksgiving holiday, traffic is bumper to bumper.
    6. Pardon me, do you know if thereís a subway close to here?
    7. Please fill out your customs declaration form on your own.

    8. The baggage handling system at Charles de Gaulle Airport will be upgraded soon.

    9. Stronger security measures will be implemented until the end of this year.

    10. This tour bus goes through many historic sites in Philadelphia.
    1. Comma splice. ...Broadway. I heard...
    2. Okay
    3. I'd use exclamation marks, or at least one in the first sentence.
    4. Okay.
    5. I think bumper-to-bumper should have hyphens, but I haven't looked it up.
    6. Okay.
    7. Okay
    8. Okay.
    9. This implies that after the first of the year, the security will not be as strict. Is that what you meant? If so, okay.
    10. To a site, through an area. (Otherwise, it sounds like the bus is going to go blasting through the wall at Independence Hall.)
    I'm not a teacher, but I write for a living. Please don't ask me about 2nd conditionals, but I'm a safe bet for what reads well in (American) English.

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    #3

    Re: Could you proofread these senteces? ^^

    /A learner/

    Yeah!, why not?


    Quote Originally Posted by juliana0403 View Post
    Could you proofread these sentences?

    Thank you

    1. We should avoid Broadway. I've heard it’s gridlocked.
    2. You know what! JDH Motors is running a good promotion.
    3. Hey, keep your eyes on the road! You've just run through the stop sign!
    4. We should take the subway to avoid bad traffic.
    5. Because of the Thanksgiving holiday, traffic is the bumper to bumper.
    6. Pardon me, do you know if there are any subways close to here?
    7. Please fill out/in your customs declaration form on your own.

    8. The baggage handling (system) at Charles de Gaulle Airport will be upgraded soon.

    9. Stronger security measures will be implemented until the end of this year.

    10. This tour bus goes through many historic sites in Philadelphia.

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    Re: Could you proofread these senteces? ^^

    Thank you guys. It's a lot helpful to me.

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    #5

    Re: Could you proofread these senteces? ^^

    What are you going to use these proofread sentences for?
    Or you needed the correction so as to make a check on your grammar knowledge or mine maybe?

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    #6

    Re: Could you proofread these senteces? ^^

    I don't object to the tense change, although the original was fine, but traffic is not "the" bumper-to-bumper.
    I'm not a teacher, but I write for a living. Please don't ask me about 2nd conditionals, but I'm a safe bet for what reads well in (American) English.

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