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    please I want from anybody to correct my short sentences !!

    1-It is located in Manama in Bahrain.

    2- Moreover, it was opened in two stages: The first stage was in 1870, and the second stage was in 1880.So, on 1 Nov 1999, we visited ........

    3- The person who took us as leader was a fourth year nursing student and her name was Noor.

    4- According to this visit ; I will talk in this report about all the places that we visited in detail.

    5- We went to different places and sections.

    6- Also, on our way to the internal places, we saw lifts for emergency uses.

    7- There is a separate building is called: .....

    8- The dietitian determines the proper food and meals fordiabetics.

    9- In this room, the persons work in the preparation of medications.

    10- This is the last place that we ended our visit.

    11- There are three colors of labels
    12- I enjoyed a lot when I visited the different sections of the school
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    #2

    Re: please I want from anybody to correct my short sentences !!

    please help me ...!!

    I need from some one to correct the previous sentences!!

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    Re: please I want from anybody to correct my short sentences !!

    Quote Originally Posted by Noor92 View Post
    1-It is located in Manama in Bahrain. (OK)

    2- Moreover, it was opened in two stages: The first stage was in 1870, and the second stage was in 1880.So, on 1 Nov 1999, we visited ........ (OK)

    3- The person who took us as leader (OR "who lead us") was a fourth year nursing student and her name was Noor.

    4- I will talk in this report about all the places that we visited in detail. (OK)

    5- We went to different places and sections. (OK)


    6- Also, on our way to the internal places, we saw lifts for emergency uses. (OK)

    7- There is a separate building is called: .....

    8- The dietitian determines the proper food and meals for diabetics.

    9- In this room, the persons work in (OR "on") the preparation of medications. (OR"....workers prepare medications")

    10- This is the last place that we ended our visit (OR "......that we visited")

    11- There are three colors of labels

    12- I enjoyed a lot when I visited the different sections of the school
    OR "I very much enjoyed our/my visit to the different sections of the school".

    Some suggestions.

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    Re: please I want from anybody to correct my short sentences !!

    Quote Originally Posted by billmcd View Post
    OR "I very much enjoyed our/my visit to the different sections of the school".

    Some suggestions.

    thank you very much .

    But I have a further question.

    Can I say about the name of the topis : A visit to ( Any place) ?

    Also, Can I say : " Room preparation of medications " ?

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    Re: please I want from anybody to correct my short sentences !!

    Quote Originally Posted by Noor92 View Post
    thank you very much .

    But I have a further question.

    Can I say about the name of the topis : A visit to ( Any place) ?

    Also, Can I say : " Room preparation of medications " ?
    #1 I assume you mean "topic". Yes.
    #2 I would use "Medication(s) preparation room".

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