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ZaraCastle

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How much risk is acceptable in the pursuit of scientific and technological progress?

Give reasons for your answer.



Science and technology, it is not an overstatement to say that they are the key to open every door in achievements of human. However, the pursuit of scientific and technological progress is always not the easy thing that usually accompanies plenty of difficulty, risk, even sometimes you can pay for your whole life. Some below opinions may be give you a clearer view before deciding to get you in this field.

At the beginning time, as other fields, fund may be the first one should be considered about when you start to a field. For instance, if the current economic condition doesn't allow you to spend too much money on a study, everybody in your family need you to earn money for expending the daily life.So, it should be a problem if you don't have enough money to invest in this field. Nonetheless, it can be a common problem and in this situation, you are able to solve it if you are in full of desire, confidence and particularly, determination.

Besides that, starting in study of science and technology, your relationship with everybody may be restricted because you don't have much time to connect closely to or simply to talk or communicate with them frequently. As the result, this may be cause you some problems in the future when you need their help. For this reason, it should be a little concern to you but it wouldn't be a main problem because a good relationship usually need to be built up on sympathy with everybody around. With your appetite, everybody can understand and give you a support to fulfill your goals.

Nevertheless, one important thing need to be considered when you start to pursue science and technology is your ability and your method to do it. What will you do when you couldn't achieve the goals you want while you invested a lot of effort and time for them? Could it be a disaster for you? At that time, do you still have enough confidence, determination to start again? It will be a difficult question that may be only you can answer it. This may be the most risk that you should consider carefully before starting in the scientific and technological development.

Overall, any fields when you decide to invest on them also have advantages and disadvantages. The rest one just depends on you, your effort and determination to achieve the goals you planned. If you are able to overcome these difficulties, any risks will no longer be important problems.


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Need to improve, grammer, sentence formation etc... I can give you 4.0/4.5
 
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