My wife writes her diary to practice her English.
In the afternoon, I went to my own house. I cleaned the floor and stayed there for two hours. When I came back home, I stopped at the market near my own house and bought some food.
I suggested her to clearify about own house that might be confusing.
What should we say?
I went to my new house which I've just bought one for my own. I cleaned the floor and stayed there for two hours. When I came back home, I stopped at the market near that house and bought some food.
Please correct the writing for us.
Of course, it is her diary, so she knows where she was in the morning; but a reader would wonder.
PS: If the previous sentence said, "In the morning, I went to a friend's house, and in the afternoon I went back to my own house", that would make sense. So the context of the sentence is important.
Originally Posted by 2006
Who owns her "home'?
Is she the sole owner of her new house?
1. She stays at the house that she rents.The owner of her "home" is the owner of the house that she rents.
2. Yes,she is.
She rents the place she lives at, which is her home. She now owns a house, but it is not her home.
If she (has)(owns) only one house, she shouldn't say 'my new house'; because she has only one house.
So she can simply talk about her home and her house, which are two different places. She shouldn't say "my own house", just 'my house'.
Now try to correct what your wife wrote.
Last edited by 2006; 11-Jan-2011 at 00:27.
Now I try to correct it.
Today, I went to the house that I have just bought it. I cleaned the floor and stayed there for two hours.Before I came back home, I stopped at the market near that house and bought some food.
Please give some suggestion to help improve my writing.
I learned a lot from 2006's suggestions.Thank you.
I will continue correcting the diary writing and need further suggestions.
I would like to continue asking questions in this thread but the following questions perhaps no more concern about "own house".
Do I have to begin another thread or continue my questions on this thread?
Also, make the title of each thread identify what the topic of the thread is, as you did in this thread.