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    Writing about someone who is dead

    My wife wrote"I think of my mother.Now she is dead."
    I corrected writing for her.

    I think of my mother who has already passed away.
    Is it better or not?

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    Re: Writing about someone who is dead

    Do you object to the word "dead"?
    I'm not a teacher, but I write for a living. Please don't ask me about 2nd conditionals, but I'm a safe bet for what reads well in (American) English.

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    #3

    Re: Writing about someone who is dead

    How about: I think of my late mother

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    #4

    Re: Writing about someone who is dead

    Quote Originally Posted by Suthipong View Post
    My wife wrote"I think of my mother. Now she is dead."
    "I often think of my mother. She's dead now".

    This would sound more natural in a conversation, the second sentence adding a note of explanation/expansion.

    If you find 'dead' too harsh a word, try "She is no longer with us".

    Tdol's suggestion sounds fine for a diary entry.

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    Re: Writing about someone who is dead

    Quote Originally Posted by Barb_D View Post
    Do you object to the word "dead"?
    No,I don't and will not object to the word "dead" in my life.
    Being a buddhist,I study the philosophy of dead and hope to be able to face it with understanding.
    It might not be good English, but I hope you understand.
    Thank you.

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    Re: Writing about someone who is dead

    I asked because you said you "corrected" her writing, but what she had written was not wrong. She is dead now is a much more natural word order but there was nothing incorrect about the original.

    Tdol's suggestion is quite natural.
    Your revision was not: who has already passed away.
    You could say "who recently passed away" or "who passed away ten years ago this week" or many other combinations, but not with "who has already."
    I'm not a teacher, but I write for a living. Please don't ask me about 2nd conditionals, but I'm a safe bet for what reads well in (American) English.

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    Re: Writing about someone who is dead

    Quote Originally Posted by Suthipong View Post
    My wife wrote "I think of my mother. Now she is dead."
    I corrected writing for her.
    You did the right thing.
    What your wife wrote could be interpreted as some form of voodoo. Your wife thought of her mother; and now she is dead.

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    Re: Writing about someone who is dead

    Quote Originally Posted by Barb_D View Post
    I asked because you said you "corrected" her writing, but what she had written was not wrong. She is dead now is a much more natural word order but there was nothing incorrect about the original.

    Tdol's suggestion is quite natural.
    Your revision was not: who has already passed away.
    You could say "who recently passed away" or "who passed away ten years ago this week" or many other combinations, but not with "who has already."
    Hi Barb_D,
    Thank you.
    Since I'm not a native, the way I use English might be strange.Please be further kinly help me improving my English.

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