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    What is wrong with this sentence?

    Please consider my application recently advertised in the Sunday Heights for the entry-level bookkeeping position.


    Is there a comma after application or would i put recently advertised in the Sunday Heights to the end of the sentence.

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    Re: What is wrong with this sentence?

    Quote Originally Posted by stedgegirl View Post
    Please consider my application recently advertised in the Sunday Heights for the entry-level bookkeeping position.


    Is there a comma after application or would i put recently advertised in the Sunday Heights to the end of the sentence.
    You are a native English speaker and I am not. So you know it better than me. I just feel bad about your sentence, I would write it as:

    Please consider my application for (or regarding?) the entry-level bookkeeping position recently advertised in (or on?) the Sunday Heights.

    As you said, you'd better put it at the end of the sentence.

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    Re: What is wrong with this sentence?

    Quote Originally Posted by stedgegirl View Post
    Please consider my application recently advertised in the Sunday Heights for the entry-level bookkeeping position.


    Is Should there be (obviously there isn't now) a comma after "application" or would I put "recently advertised in the Sunday Heights" to the end of the sentence?
    Hi and welcome, stedgegirl,

    Personally (meaning in my very particular opinion): yes I would add a comma after "application", plus a comma after "Sunday Heights":

    Please consider my application, recently advertised in the Sunday Heights, for the entry-level bookkeeping position.

    Hope it helps (to breathe while you read, at least)

    Greetings,

    Charliedeut

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    Re: What is wrong with this sentence?

    Quote Originally Posted by charliedeut View Post
    Hi and welcome, stedgegirl,

    Personally (meaning in my very particular opinion): yes I would add a comma after "application", plus a comma after "Sunday Heights":

    Please consider my application, recently advertised in the Sunday Heights, for the entry-level bookkeeping position.

    Hope it helps (to breathe while you read, at least)

    Greetings,

    Charliedeut
    I've mixed up! is the application in response to an advertisement? Or the application is itself advertised?

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    Re: What is wrong with this sentence?

    Quote Originally Posted by Khosro View Post
    I've mixed up! is the application in response to an advertisement? Or the application is itself advertised?
    Hi Khosro,

    You made a point there. It is my guess that the application was published, because it was one requirement to fulfill. That would be the case, for instance, if she were applying for a job in a public (=governement-owned) librabry.

    I welcome other interpretations/clarifications.

    Greetings,

    Charliedeut

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    Re: What is wrong with this sentence?

    Quote Originally Posted by charliedeut View Post
    Hi Khosro,

    You made a point there. It is my guess that the application was published, because it was one requirement to fulfill. That would be the case, for instance, if she were applying for a job in a public (=governement-owned) librabry.

    I welcome other interpretations/clarifications.

    Greetings,

    Charliedeut
    Thank you. No need for interpretations, Just a clarification by Stedgegirl herself.

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    #7

    Re: What is wrong with this sentence?

    Quote Originally Posted by Khosro View Post
    Please consider my application for (or regarding?) the entry-level bookkeeping position recently advertised in (or on?) the Sunday Heights.
    I don't think an application can be advertised, only a vacancy/job/post. I'd go for the version above.

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