Student or Learner
I realize that ****** College has raised many award-winning students. I wish I could be one of them.
This is the sentence I typed when I answered a question that asked me why I want to study a program with the college I applied. Is it correct?
Thanks for your suggestion. so my sentence is correct still?
Your second sentence is not grammatically incorrect, but I think you would be closer to your intended meaning if you said:
I would like to be one of them.
Or: I wish to be one of them.
Or even: I hope to be one of them.
By saying "I wish I could be one of them" you are admitting defeat -- you are not and cannot be one of them. But I bet you COULD be.
I'm not a teacher, but I write for a living. Please don't ask me about 2nd conditionals, but I'm a safe bet for what reads well in (American) English.
Wow! That sounds a lot better! I feel I have more confidence when I read your correction out loud. Thank you so much!