Dear Sir or Madam,
My name is Elita Yunada, I am a student enrolled at Unversitas Pembangunan Nasional "Veteran" Yogyakarta, my major is International Relations. I would like to be considered for the opportunity to be nominated for the Indonesia-Canada Youth Exchange Program (ICYEP) for 2011-2012.
I would like to briefly introduce myself. I come from a family that values culture highly. Also I have always had an interest in numbers, ever sine I started school. My parents have been a source of constant motivation, especially my mother, to always do my best in my studies. Resulting that throughout my education, from primarmy school to university, I have been a high achiever.
My strenghts are self-confidence, fouc, passion, optimism and perseverance. Furthermore, I am highly motivated, have initiative and a hardworking and ambitious person. I am equally comfortable working alone or as part of a group. Being in new situations stimulates me and I am able to make friends easily. I am able to learn from my mistakes and any failures, ensuring that they do not happen again. My weaknesses are doubt, frustration and stagnancy.
During my studies, I have gained a theoretical and practical background in social politics, especially diplomacy and how to negotiate. I am familiar with international and national issues due to my course. Analysing, describing and explaining issues within social, political, economic and global context. Delivering presentations to audiences comes easy to me, I am able to speak clearly in front of people.
My studies include a global world view, as well as specific issues to countries, such as Canada. Studying at an undergraduate level has given me a strong background in the fundamentals of various internatal relations, however this has only made me want to continue my studies to a professional level and expand my knowledge. This would be almost impossible in my native country, hence my desire to be part of the International Youth Exchange Program 2011-2012.
The IYEP would fit well with my study in International Relations, which highlights the benefits of working within an international framework. The idea of partisipating in the IYEP first came to me when was on my course at university. I chose the Indonesia-Canada Youth Exchange Programme due to its contents and prestige. The course description greatly appeals to me and believe that it will be of great benefit to me to partisipate. The chance to study in Canana, a country of culture and technology, will give the opportunity to exhance information with students from other cultures and nationalities. From my own background, I am knowledgable in traditional customs such as sewing and magical practices. The high quality of education offered and an atmosphere conductive to learning means I am sure to have as a pleasant stay as previous partisipants have had.
In summary, I consider myself to be a good candidate for the ICYEP because I am young, energetic, hardworking, visionary and motivated. I would like the opportunity to do something beneficial for my country as well as for Canada. My studies show that I have always tried and achieved greatly. I believe that partisipation in this program will greatly improve my development further and fulfil my potential.
Thank you in advance for considering my application.
Not a teacher only a native.
I have attempted to re-write your application, though a few things don't add up. For example, you say you have 'self confidence' as a strength, but under weaknesses you list doubt. Also 'stagnancy' isn't often used in a personal context.
This was done fairly quickly, please check it over and use this as a framework not a finished article.
All the best.
Student or Learner