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Volcano1985

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Countries have believed in the necessity of cooperation in order to subsist, increase economic-social prosperity, and with the globalization trend, trading of goods, service and technology have increased and been liberalised among countries.
 

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Countries have believed in the necessity of cooperation in order to subsist and to increase economic-social prosperity. With the trend toward globalization [STRIKE]trend[/STRIKE], trading of goods, service and technology [STRIKE]have [/STRIKE] has increased and been liberalised among countries.

I think this is what you meant? It was unclear what they "have believed" in the past and how globalization has changed things.

The subject of "has" is trading.
 

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Yes, this is.

They have believed that trading among countries is essentail to subsist economically.(Like export-import) And the globalization has made countries trade with each other for the goods, services and technologies not available within their own borders.

Clear now?
 

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Hi, friend,

Why don't you write it in small sentences instead of making it a hotchpotch?
 
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Hi, friend,

Why don't you write it in small sentences instead of making it a hotchpotch?

And why don't you suggest an alternative instead of offering only criticism?
 

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Sorry,

I never meant to criticize anybody, because I am also a person who love to learn English . I just expressed what I felt when I went through the sentence. I felt that, it will be more easy to grasp if he could use small sentences. Especially for ordinary readers like me. thats all.
 

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Why would I think 'small' ?
 

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You are mistaken friend.

I just meant you to write that in short sentences, instead of making it a mix of sentences. Then it will be easy to understand for ordinary readers who are not very proficient in language.

Anyway, I don't want to continue with this argument.
 
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I think my suggested rewrite and your response are both clear.
 
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