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Lucy Helenna Rodriguez O'Brien
I feel that I must inform you and apologize for my late UCAS application for the course, Chemistry with Forensic Science. My delay was due to my immigration to the United States.
I understand that you might be concerned that this is the second time applying to this university. My application was withdrawn due to my family's financial issues last year. This issue has been resolved this year, as I am able to apply to the FAFSA as a permanent resident in the U.S.
I am hoping that I would still have the opportunity to be considered to take this course because I am enthusiastic about Chemistry and Forensic Science. It is my wish to study at Heriot–Watt University.
I apologize again for this delayed application and any inconvenience this delay has caused. Thank you for your time, and I look forward to hearing from you soon.
Sui Chi Cheung (Gigi)