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    Power limitations

    Please, check if the following passage is grammatically correct. Thanks!

    As a matter of fact, many revolutions go through such stages. For example, Romanian dictator, Nicolae Ceausescu was executed a few days after his regime had been toppled, in late 1989. We can say in favor of Ceausescu's opponents, who were his former supporters and hastened to desert him, that they were subjected to pressure and feared that the deposed president might wage a counter attack. Therefore, they felt they must execute him to defend the revolution. And yet, in other Eastern European countries, the regimes which came to power, refrained generally from launching campaigns against their predecessors and sought reconciliation and calm. Mr. M's story indicates that stability in the country hasn't been restored yet, and that the revolutionary dynamics in the streets are not over yet. The country's story shows clearly that the official in charge has power limitations against the masses. This detail is extremely important due to the fact that, in recent Friday's demonstrations in the country's streets, some protesters called for driving out the Ambassador.

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    Re: Power limitations

    Quote Originally Posted by motico View Post
    Please, check if the following passage is grammatically correct. Thanks!


    As a matter of fact, many revolutions go through such stages. For example, Romanian dictator, Nicolae Ceausescu was executed a few days after his regime had been toppled, in late 1989. We can say in favor of Ceausescu's opponents, who were his former supporters and hastened to desert him, that they were subjected to pressure and feared that the deposed president might wage a counter attack. Therefore, they felt they must execute him to defend the revolution. And yet, in other Eastern European countries, the regimes which came to power, refrained generally from launching campaigns against their predecessors and sought reconciliation and calm. Mr. M's story indicates that stability in the country hasn't been restored yet, and that the revolutionary dynamics in the streets are not over yet. The country's story shows clearly that the official in charge has power limitations against the masses. This detail is extremely important due to the fact that, in recent Friday's demonstrations in the country's streets, some protesters called for driving out the Ambassador.

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    (1) Excellent as usual.

    (2) May I simply note a few minor points that might distract some

    readers?

    (a) no comma after "dictator." That is definitely "wrong."

    (b) No comma after "toppled" -- unless you want to stress it as an

    afterthought.

    (c) "they felt they must execute him" might be phrased as

    "they felt they had to execute him."

    (d) No comma after "power."

    (e) "Mr. M's story" should be, I think, "Mr. M.'s story." I think that

    you need a period after M, for it stands for his full last name.

    (f) I think that many writing "experts" would suggest avoiding the use

    of phrases such as "due to the fact." They say that it takes up a lot

    of space. Be direct, they say. Rewrite it using "because."

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    Re: Power limitations

    Quote Originally Posted by motico View Post
    some protesters called for driving out the Ambassador.
    some protesters called for the expulsion of the ___ Ambassador.

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