Motivation letter for undergraduate study

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mishec

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Hey, could you be so kind and check my motivation letter? This is what I got so far, I would have to send it to the University during this week.
Help is really appreciated, as well as constructive criticism. Nothing in this letter is a "must-be", so feel free to change anything!
CHEERS!

Dear Sir or Madam,
I recently found out about the possibility of studying in Denmark. Slovakia - the country where I was born and raised - became a member of EMU 2 years ago. Whereas we are post-Communist country still trying to evolve into modern country with stable economy with high standard of living. Thus the country needs new ideas and young professionals.
I have been studying english since I was seven years old and I have always enjoyed meeting new people and getting to know different cultures. I have had a desire to study business and marketing since I was 10 years old! I have an ambition to be successful and work for a big concern, as well I would enjoy starting up my own business. I realize that an appropriate educations is needed for both of my dreams and I believe that Your University would give me much academic preparation and practical experience. I am highly motivated, because in marketing and sales, there are almost no boundaries, „the sky is the limit". I will work hard to achieve my goals and aspirations. Obtaining a degree from a UCN would be an honour and if given a chance, I will do my best to succeed.
I do not expect this to be easy, on the contrary, I think it will be really challenging. Nevertheless I am prepared and excited about things waiting for me in the future. I am open-minded, creative, social, with a sense of business and I think the Marketing Management AP Degree programme will perfectly suit my personality. That is why I will do my best to handle all the pressure and demands which are part of completing the academic program.

/What do you thing. Any opinion is highly appreciated!
Thanks!
mishec
 

freezeframe

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Have you researched how to write academic motivation letters? There are many resources on line. Also, does your school and/or library have resources on this?

The tone of your letter and many things you say in it are very inappropriate.
 

mishec

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Yes, I actually did a little bit, I even started with my friends ML. Im gonna check it once again and work on it.
But if you could do list of necessary changes, that would be awesome!
MP
 
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