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    several expressions

    Dear all,
    I have been trying to make the following sentences more vivid and native-like, but I can't. Could you pleae help me out? Thank you very much!

    1. None of them noticed that an old woman and a wolf were hiding in the dark outside the house.

    2. The door was bumped open and three strong wolves charged in.

    3. The sky was dark and the strong wind was blowing hard.

    4. Next morning, a tremendous apple tree stood on where Alice had tossed the apple seed the night before. It was so tall that the top was in the clouds.

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    Re: several expressions

    I am always wary of trying to make language vivid, which often becomes an exercise in choosing obsucre near synonyms. The one I would change it the third as bumped doesn't really work for me. The door flew open?

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    Re: several expressions

    What is this for?

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