Could any native speaker of Engilsh please edit my passage?

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Ever Student

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Hello all,

Where would you like to be professionally in ten years? Use details to support your response.

(for speaking skills)


"I would like to be in a speaking-English country and improve my English skills. During ten years I have to interact with the speakers of English and learn how to organize this language."

Is this passage cohesive and coherent within 15 seconds?
 

Raymott

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Hello all,

Where would you like to be professionally in ten years? Use details to support your response.

(for speaking skills)


"I would like to be in a speaking-English country and improve my English skills. During ten years I have to interact with the speakers of English and learn how to organize this language."

Is this passage cohesive and coherent within 15 seconds?
There are a few defects.
This is what I'd say:
"I would like to be in an English-speaking country, improving my English skills. During those ten years I will have been interacting with speakers of English and learning how to organize my use of this language."
 

Ever Student

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This is what I'd say:
"I would like to be in an English-speaking country, improving my English skills. During those ten years I will have been interacting with speakers of English and learning how to organize my use of this language."
Thank you,
It pleased me to meet you here again.
 
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