[Essay] Ghastly bane... it pours... unceasingly...

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The sotry begun in early 70's of 'Padre', a small villiage in North Kerala. All moppets were excited that they found a new bustle to enjoy.Chasing after those 'big feathered creatures' which are spitting somewhat liquid over their land. Meanwhile, they didn't realise that those gaints were going to snatch their life and happiness forever.

Padre is famous for it's cashew plantation. In 1976, Plantation Corporation of Kerala decided to use 'Endosulfan', a toxic pesticide over the crops. They employed this chemical in cashew estates by an aerial spray using helicopters. This poison started diffusing in the air, soil, streams, drinking water, and slowly to the mother's milk. The situation got worse in midst of 90's. It started showing it's bloody cannibalistic faces. Mothers were started afried of their infants and abortion was a usual condition. Babies born with deformed limbs, scale-like skin, protruding toungs and eyes, exra fingers and nose, cleft palats and lips, respiratory deseases, mental retardation, chromosomal aberations and blindness. This list is still growing with undiscovered diseases and more than 500 death.

In 2001, Kerala Govt. banned this pesticide. But, because of the pressure from pesticide industries it was revoked. From the past ten years, sixteen different expert groups were studied the effect of 'Endosulfan'. In 2006, Kerala Govt. provided a compensation and rehabilitation package for the victims. More than '10000' are officially registered yet. Today, the voice against Endosulfan reached at it's peak. They are pleading for a global ban for this poison. But, in the Stockholm Convention which held at the 'Geneva International Conference Centre (CICG)' from 25 to 29 April 2011, Indian Government took a soft stand for this case. India is still opposing the ban while more than 80 countries had already banned and 27 were undecided.

Development and environmental protection should go hand in hand. At least we have to show a little compassion to these fellows. Let us hope for the country to overhaul it's lackadaisical attitude towards this case...

* ..any corrections(content, logical usage and grammatical errors etc. ) can be commented ..
 

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There are numerous grammatical and vocabulary mistakes here. But why are there this many spelling mistakes? When you post something here, it underlines misspelled words with red. It looks careless...
 

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There are numerous grammatical and vocabulary mistakes here. But why are there this many spelling mistakes? When you post something here, it underlines misspelled words with red. It looks careless...
It underlines almost every word for me. It depends on the language your browser is using.
 

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The story begun in early 70's of 'Padre', a small village in North Kerala. All moppets were excited that they found a new bustle to enjoy. Chasing after those 'big feathered creatures' which are spitting somewhat liquid over their land. Meanwhile, they didn't realize that those giants were going to snatch their life and happiness forever.

Padre is famous for its cashew plantation. In 1976, Plantation Corporation of Kerala decided to use 'Endosulfan', a toxic pesticide over the crops. They employed this chemical in cashew estates by an aerial spray using helicopters. This poison started diffusing in the air, soil, streams, drinking water, and slowly to the mother's milk. The situation got worse in midst of 90's. It started showing its bloody cannibalistic faces. Mothers were started afraid of their infants and abortion was a usual condition. Babies born with deformed limbs, scale-like skin, protruding tongues and eyes, extra fingers and nose, cleft palates and lips, respiratory diseases, mental retardation, chromosomal aberrations and blindness. This list is still growing with undiscovered diseases and more than 500 deaths.

In 2001, Kerala Govt. banned this pesticide. But, because of the pressure from pesticide industries it was revoked. From the past ten years, sixteen different expert groups were studied the effect of 'Endosulfan'. In 2006, Kerala Govt. provided a compensation and rehabilitation package for the victims. More than '10000' are officially registered yet. Today, the voice against Endosulfan reached at its peak. They are pleading for a global ban for this poison. But, in the Stockholm Convention which held at the 'Geneva International Conference Centre (CICG)' from 25 to 29 April 2011, Indian Government took a soft stand for this case. India is still opposing the ban while more than 80 countries had already banned and 27 were undecided.

Development and environmental protection should go hand in hand. At least we have to show a little compassion to these fellows. Let us hope for the country to overhaul its lackadaisical attitude towards this case...

* any corrections(content, logical usage and grammatical errors etc. ) can be commented ..




Oh!!!! :-D Thanks for the comments.
 

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The story begun in the early 70's in 'Padre', a small village in North Kerala. All the moppets (do you mean children? mopped is archaic) were excited that they found a new bustle (do you mean game?) to enjoy -- chasing after those 'big feathered creatures' [STRIKE]which [/STRIKE] that are spitting something liquid over their land. Meanwhile, they [STRIKE]didn't[/STRIKE] don't realize that those giants [STRIKE]were[/STRIKE] are going to snatch (take away?) their life and happiness forever. (don't switch tenses half way in)

Padre is famous for its cashew plantation. In 1976, Plantation Corporation of Kerala decided to use 'Endosulfan', a toxic pesticide, on the crops. They employed (used? some other word?) this chemical on cashew estates (fields?) by [STRIKE]an[/STRIKE] aerial spray, using helicopters. This poison started diffusing through the air, soil, streams, drinking water, and slowly into the mother's milk. The situation got worse in [STRIKE]midst of [/STRIKE] mid-90's. It (what is it? the antecedent seems to be "the situation") started showing its bloody cannibalistic face[STRIKE]s[/STRIKE]. Mothers [STRIKE]were[/STRIKE] started to fear [STRIKE]their infants [/STRIKE] giving birth (?) and abortion [STRIKE]was a usual condition.[/STRIKE] became widespread. Babies were born with deformed limbs, scale-like skin, protruding tongues and eyes, extra fingers and nose, cleft palates and lips, respiratory diseases, mental retardation, chromosomal aberrations and blindness. This list is still growing as more diseases are discovered [STRIKE]undiscovered diseases [/STRIKE] (the list can't grow with diseases we don't know of yet!) and more than 500 deaths (I would make this last part into a new sentence).

In 2001, Kerala Govt. banned this pesticide. But, because of the pressure from the pesticide industry [STRIKE]it[/STRIKE] the ban was revoked. [STRIKE]From[/STRIKE] For the past ten years, sixteen different expert groups [STRIKE]were [/STRIKE]studied the effect of 'Endosulfan'. In 2006, Kerala Govt. provided [STRIKE]a[/STRIKE] compensation and rehabilitation package for the victims. More than '10000' are officially registered [STRIKE]yet[/STRIKE] already. Today, the voice against Endosulfan reached [STRIKE]at [/STRIKE]its peak (really? it can't go any higher?). They (who are they?) are pleading for a global ban [STRIKE]for [/STRIKE] on this poison. But, [STRIKE]in[/STRIKE] during the Stockholm Convention which was held at the 'Geneva International Conference Centre (CICG)' from 25 to 29 April 2011, the Indian Government took a soft stand [STRIKE]for this case[/STRIKE] on this issue. India is still opposing the ban while more than 80 countries [STRIKE]had [/STRIKE] have already banned this chemical and 27 [STRIKE]were [/STRIKE] are undecided.

(Industrial? Technological?) Development and environmental protection should go hand in hand. At least we have to show a little (just a little?) compassion towards these [STRIKE]fellows[/STRIKE] people. Let us hope [STRIKE]for[/STRIKE] that the country [STRIKE]to[/STRIKE] [STRIKE]overhaul[/STRIKE] changes its lackadaisical (!!) attitude towards this case...

* any corrections(content, logical usage and grammatical errors etc. ) can be commented ..




Oh!!!! :-D Thanks for the comments. You're welcome.
 

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Great comment freeeframe!!! This is what, I am really looking for... :-D
 
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