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    For Which

    Bin Laden was killed in a ground operation outside Islamabad based on US intelligence, the first lead for which emerged last August.

    ..., the first lead for killing him emerged last August?

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    #2

    Re: For Which

    Quote Originally Posted by Volcano1985 View Post
    Bin Laden was killed in a ground operation outside Islamabad based on US intelligence, the first lead for which emerged last August.

    ..., the first lead for killing him emerged last August?
    'information about his whereabouts'. It's very badly written - 'for' is simply the wrong preposition, and 'which' refers to a noun that is not present in the sentence.

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    #3

    Re: For Which

    How should it be rewritten then?

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    #4

    Re: For Which

    Quote Originally Posted by Volcano1985 View Post
    How should it be rewritten then?
    I think it's beyond rewriting.

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    #5

    Re: For Which

    Quote Originally Posted by Volcano1985 View Post
    How should it be rewritten then?
    I understand why you want this, but the problem is that it's an early press report, which tries to compress as much undigested 'information' as possible into as few words as possible. I don't know how a 'lead' can 'emerge'. The story seems to be based on something like this: some source, unattributed, said that information began to emerge last August (though who can know this is beyond me [and incidentally this isn't the place to discuss this]). The 'journalist' got some impressions and threw a few words at them in the hope that readers would make some kind of sense of it - 'for which' just doesn't fit.

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    #6

    Re: For Which

    Quote Originally Posted by Volcano1985 View Post
    Bin Laden was killed in a ground operation outside Islamabad based on US intelligence, the first lead for which emerged last August.

    ..., the first lead for killing him emerged last August?

    WARNING: NOT A TEACHER!!!


    (1) The teachers have given us excellent answers. If you do not want

    a non-teacher's opinion, stop reading now.

    (2) I believe that the sentence is grammatical.

    (3) I believe that it might be easier to analyze if we simplify it

    a bit:

    He was killed in a ground operation based on U.S. intelligence, the

    first lead for which emerged in August. / He was killed in a ground

    operation based on U.S. intelligence, for which the first lead emerged

    in August.

    (4) I believe that "which" refers to "U.S. intelligence."

    (5) In other words, this one sentence is a combination of two

    sentences something like:

    He was killed in a ground operation based on U.S. intelligence.

    In August, the first lead -- good information about his location --

    emerged for U.S. intelligence.


    Respectfully yours,


    James

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