Roselin
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- Joined
- Sep 20, 2008
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- Student or Learner
- Native Language
- Hindi
- Home Country
- India
- Current Location
- India
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A wonderful dog
The moment I enter my home, I am greeted by a wonderful friend and companion of mine, Tony- my dog. He is such a darling for me that I miss him whenever I am out of the home. He is brown in colour and about 3 feet tall. He has big long ears always hung downwards. Three strands of hair standing straight up on his head make him look funny. His two brown eyes outlined with thin black lashes are as deep as an ocean. He has a small nose with a big black dot on it. The front two legs are curved outwards. He is very smart and stubborn by nature. When he doesn’t want to eat his cookies, he hides them in the sand in the backyard. He is scared of my father only. He doesn’t like bathing but loves to roll in mud.
He wags his tail whenever he has to show his love for others. He likes to play with balls. Whenever we throw a ball away, he fetches it to us. During winters he curls up in our laps, all snug and warm. He becomes angry very soon if we don’t pay attention to him. He barks as loud as possible if hungry. I still remember the day when he was brought by my mother. He was only 7 days old, couldn’t even walk properly. Every time he would try to walk, he would fall down, for he was too short heighted that his stomach would touch the ground, causing him problem to walk properly. We fed him milk by a bottle. He would chewed our sandals if we didn’t take him out with us. We cherish his childhood memories. He has become a member of our family.
Having problem in concluding the paragraph.
A wonderful dog
The moment I enter my home, I am greeted by a wonderful friend and companion of mine, Tony- my dog. He is such a darling for me that I miss him whenever I am out of the home. He is brown in colour and about 3 feet tall. He has big long ears always hung downwards. Three strands of hair standing straight up on his head make him look funny. His two brown eyes outlined with thin black lashes are as deep as an ocean. He has a small nose with a big black dot on it. The front two legs are curved outwards. He is very smart and stubborn by nature. When he doesn’t want to eat his cookies, he hides them in the sand in the backyard. He is scared of my father only. He doesn’t like bathing but loves to roll in mud.
He wags his tail whenever he has to show his love for others. He likes to play with balls. Whenever we throw a ball away, he fetches it to us. During winters he curls up in our laps, all snug and warm. He becomes angry very soon if we don’t pay attention to him. He barks as loud as possible if hungry. I still remember the day when he was brought by my mother. He was only 7 days old, couldn’t even walk properly. Every time he would try to walk, he would fall down, for he was too short heighted that his stomach would touch the ground, causing him problem to walk properly. We fed him milk by a bottle. He would chewed our sandals if we didn’t take him out with us. We cherish his childhood memories. He has become a member of our family.
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