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Hello , could you help me with this short text , it has to be grammatically correct and linguistically accurate, I am not a native speaker so I could definitely use some reviewing on it as it is for the opening of a presentation so pretty important that it sounds right :) Thanks !
If you subtract all of humanity to a village with 100 inhabitants, while maintaining the proportional ratios, here's how the population of this village looks:
57 Asians, 21 Europeans, 14 Americans (North and South America), 8 Africans 52 women, 48 men, 30 white, 70 colored, 98 heterosexual, 2 homosexual 6 people possess 59% of global wealth and all are American; 80 homeless, 70 illiterate, 50 malnurishioned; 1 dies, 1 is born, has a PC, only 1 has higher education.
If one looks at the world from this angle, it will become clear that the need for inclusion, understanding, acceptance and education is the natural and obvious.If you wake up healthy in the morning, you are more fortunate than 1 million people who will not survive next week . If you have never experienced war, never faced the loneliness of the prison cell, the agony of torture and hunger, then you are happier than 500 million people around the world.If you can go to church without fear that some will threaten you,arrest you or kill you, then you are luckier than 3 million people.If you are full, dressed and have a roof over your head, then you are richer than 75% of residents of this planet.Ako have a bank account and some money in your wallet, you belong to 8 percent of wealthy people in the world.If you read this you're not one of those 2 billion people who can not read.
The sentence in red is not clear. Do you want to say that one dies and one is born every second/minute?
I want to say that for every one that dies one is born not specifically every second, how shall I put it
An for': ' If you are full properly fed?, adequately (?) dressed and have a roof over your head ' I want to stress the fact that you can afford to buy clothes , i.e. be dressed not necesserily 'adequately'