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I'm writing a composition in which I talk about the different sale teams a company has through the country, and how these teams perform.
There is this sentence which I believe is wrong (it sounds wrong)
but I woul like to know why, which grammar rule is not complying with, so to speak:
"To sum up, sales teams in most states like NY, California and Colorado performed better than expected during 2009, but we have to study thoroughly the performance of North Carolina."
I know there that can be rephrased and look better, but my doubt is about the use of "of". As you can see, I'm still not sure wether I can use the possessive 's, or the preposition "of", and how to use the latter.
thanks a lot for your insight.
The sentence you aak about is gramatically correct, but awkward.
I would rephrase the last clause
"but we have to study thoroughly the performance of North Carolina."
"but we have to study the performance of North Carolina thoroughly."
"but we have to study North Carolina's performance thoroughly."
which of the two you use is a matter of choice, but I would consider the first to be slightly more formal
Also note that you should use "such as" rather than "like" in the first clause.