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    Hello!

    Does this sentence make sense, please?

    "According to the importance of your customers, you will agree to give them a discount".

    Thank you very much.

    Will

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    Quote Originally Posted by Will17 View Post
    Hello!

    Does this sentence make sense, please?

    "According to the importance of your customers, you will agree to give them a discount".

    Thank you very much.

    Will
    There are problems with it. The most obvious one is that "importance of your customers" is a continuous parameter, on a spectrum, whereas giving a discount seems to be a binary decision, as stated.
    "Agree to give" is a problem. Does it mean you agree with the boss to do this, or you agree with the customer if they ask?

    Why not:
    "Give a discount to your customers according to their importance to your business."
    (I think this version gives the impression that a very important customer gets a big discount, a less important customer gets a lesser discount, etc; not just a yes/no decision.) It's still very inadequate as a clear directive though.

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