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    #1

    The place that traps us

    Hi,

    How can I shorten this sentence below as it has many repeated words...?

    Home is the place that traps us, just like Earth that traps us from going to other planets, our Universe that traps us from going to other universes.

    what about:

    1.
    Home is the place that traps us, just like Earth to other planets, our Universe to other universes.

    2.
    Home is the place that traps us, just like Earth that traps us from other planets, our Universe that traps us from other universes.

    Thanks.

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    #2

    Re: The place that traps us

    Not a teacher

    I'll be waiting for other opinios since I'm curious how it could be shortened myself, but I think that without losing depth of meaning or becoming ambiguous it cannot be shortened.


    M.

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    #3

    Re: The place that traps us

    "Trap" isn't the right concept. Animals will chew their own legs off to escape from a trap. That's not how I feel about home.

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