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Please correct my essay for the IELTS task 2 !!!!!!!
Thanks in advance
Popular events like the football WC and other international sporting occasions are essential in easing international tensions and releasing patriotic emotions in a safe way.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
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Along with the booming development of technology, all countries have competed in a rat race in order to impose their power over the world. As a result, discrimination and political tensions among nations have also been a strained issue these days. However all governments have attempted to create the concord with many international co-operations, including the organization of sporting festivals such as the Olympics, the World Cup, and the like. I strongly believe that these events raise chances for participants to ease the tension whilst showing loyalty towards their countries.
As the aim of international sporting events is honoring the sportsmanship, all participants such as athletes, coaches, and audiences put conflicts aside and contribute themselves to a fair-play competition. Moreover, the athletes may be aware that the victory in a noble human-being arena like sports would be more glorious than chasing in a furious army attack. Therefore, it is reasonable to state that sport events can consolidate the love for peace and for their countries.
In addition, sporting festivals with participants from various countries are great opportunities for cultural exchanges. The host and the guest countries can introduce their traditions, then having a profound understanding of each other. A culture-based grasp is a small, yet significant step in establishing friendly relationships among nations.
Furthermore, organizing worldwide events must cost much of effort and financial investment, and require the cooperation from all joining parties. For this reason, there is no doubt that these occasions would bring numerous opportunities for global associations in preparing, such as in construction, tourism. This impact related to economics might even prolong later on and lead to a solid long-term cooperation.
Overall, considering the positive influences of sporting festivals in tackling the international tensions and promoting patriotic feelings, I myself am in favor of maintaining and developing these events worldwide.
Thanks in advance
Popular events like the football WC and other international sporting occasions are essential in easing international tensions and releasing patriotic emotions in a safe way.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
_________________________________
Along with the booming development of technology, all countries have competed in a rat race in order to impose their power over the world. As a result, discrimination and political tensions among nations have also been a strained issue these days. However all governments have attempted to create the concord with many international co-operations, including the organization of sporting festivals such as the Olympics, the World Cup, and the like. I strongly believe that these events raise chances for participants to ease the tension whilst showing loyalty towards their countries.
As the aim of international sporting events is honoring the sportsmanship, all participants such as athletes, coaches, and audiences put conflicts aside and contribute themselves to a fair-play competition. Moreover, the athletes may be aware that the victory in a noble human-being arena like sports would be more glorious than chasing in a furious army attack. Therefore, it is reasonable to state that sport events can consolidate the love for peace and for their countries.
In addition, sporting festivals with participants from various countries are great opportunities for cultural exchanges. The host and the guest countries can introduce their traditions, then having a profound understanding of each other. A culture-based grasp is a small, yet significant step in establishing friendly relationships among nations.
Furthermore, organizing worldwide events must cost much of effort and financial investment, and require the cooperation from all joining parties. For this reason, there is no doubt that these occasions would bring numerous opportunities for global associations in preparing, such as in construction, tourism. This impact related to economics might even prolong later on and lead to a solid long-term cooperation.
Overall, considering the positive influences of sporting festivals in tackling the international tensions and promoting patriotic feelings, I myself am in favor of maintaining and developing these events worldwide.