Student or Learner
Ok, I've been working on a short story and I'm kind of stuck on this one sentence. I've been writing for years and I always look things up and I got some books as references thanks to the classes I've taken back in high school, but I am somewhat stumped on how to type out this sentence.
I'll post a few sentences before it, cause if you are anything like me, it helps give an idea of what I am getting at. And the problem area I will make bold.
I reached over the rim of the tub and grabbed an ivory toothed comb from a little tray on a wooden bench. "This feels nice, doesn't it?" I asked Amor as I gently combed its fur. Amor stuck its tongue out in response, enjoying being.....
It totally sounds goofy to me and I am sure it sounds odd to anyone else reading it, but I feel stumped as to how to put it without feeling the need to leave it out all together.
I was going to type '...enjoying being combed...' but like I said, that sounds totally off. I skimmed through some threads in the form to find anything to clear up my dilemma but nothing that is relevant.
I am in no hurry at all, so I'm not expecting any instant answers.
Also, please keep on topic.
Last edited by LiliumKain; 12-Jun-2011 at 06:33. Reason: adding some tid bits
Last edited by billmcd; 12-Jun-2011 at 03:23. Reason: typo
Last edited by LiliumKain; 12-Jun-2011 at 04:05. Reason: evil typo monster
Use a noun instead of a gerund: enjoyed the attention etc.
I would use the gerund if the sentence is to remain as you originally posted it, but with a noun coming after:
Amor stuck its tongue out in response, enjoying the attention.
*slams face into keyboard* Holy cow am I an idiot.
Thank you konungursvia and emsr2d2
That sings so much more sweetly. I'm dyslexic so sometimes my head acts a little impish when it comes to writing.