Can anyone please correct my mistakes?

[sidman47]

Hi,

Unfortunately my Enlish is not very good. Please can you tell me if these sentences are grammatically correct? Thanks to all of you who will be able to help me or read my post.

Best Regards,
sidman47

Here's my text:

This was exactly what I felt at this time while walking home from work earlier than usual. I went down the Foreshadowing Road and turned right directly to the Bedluck Road where I have been living with my girlfriend Jessica for six years. Six years is quite a long time so I intent to ask her if she likes to marry me.

[Rover_KE]

This was exactly what I felt at this time while walking home from work earlier than usual. I went down the Foreshadowing Road and turned right directly onto the Bedluck Road where I have been living with my girlfriend Jessica for six years. Six years is quite a long time, so I intend to ask her if she would like to marry me.

Rover