When one hears the word racism, one thinks about the abusive behaviour towards different ethnical groups, or the belief that one's group is superior over the other. This kind of racism is easy to uncover because it is obvious, cruel and inhuman. But to describe the hidden racism, which is not visible, and is likewise harmful like the first mentioned, we now look at the hidden racism in Sweden, a country which prides itself to be one of the best and most equal in the world.
Consider a young man in his twenties, who was just a child when he had escaped to Sweden with his family as refugee. As a child, he was too young to remember his homeland and the only had a glimpse of its knowledge from the his parents' stories.
In his new homeland, He studies hard at university and succeeds in obtaining his PhD. He is overjoyed and his family is proud of him.
Then after some weeks, the young man tries to find a job with a belief that companies all around the country will fight against each other to employ him. He sends his applications to some of them and soon experiences his first disappointment. They are not interested in him. They do not even grant him an interview; those employers do not care that he is intelligent, enthusiastic and energetic.
But the young man doesn't give up. He sends his applications to twenty, thirty, forty different companies. And he receives the same answer.
He is so desperate and sad that he becomes depressive. He would rather be dead than walk the streets jobless and idle.
And who knows what would have happened to the young man if he had not met another immigrant who explained to him the reason for his failure. He simply has the wrong name! If he ever wants to find a job, he has to change his Muslim name into a Swedish one.
At the beginning, the young man does not want to believe him. But as time goes by, he understands that the man is right. So one day the young man goes to the Swedish Tax Agency, fills in some forms, and like by a trick of a magician he receives a Swedish name Andreas. He feels terrible. He has betrayed his own family, despite his parents giving him their full support.
The young man now sends his applications under his new name and lo and behold, everyone wants him. He is invited to dozens of interviews, managers are patting him friendly on his shoulder, they smile at him and treat him with expensive drinks and meals. The young man would rather smash their faces and spit at them, but he smiles too and talk friendly, because he knows that everyone in this country wears a mask.
Whenever I hear tourists praising Sweden and Swedes I think how lucky they are. They are here only on a short visit and they do know nothing about what is hidden behind the well-ordered society. Indeed, sometimes is better to be ignorant.
Ok, I gave up half way lol... there are too many things you need to fix
1. verb tense. I see that all your tenses are in the present. This is something you need to fix. In your all your paragraphs, they are all in present tense and this is not correct. In your 2nd paragraph, you need to change it to past tense, as you are talking about his childhood experience.
2. Run-on sentence. Yea, you have a lot of run on sentences. (comma slice, and incorrect usage of conjunctive adverb)
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