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    correctness of a text - Syble

    Dear teachers and friends...

    Does this text read well? Regarding the tenses, mostly.

    Syble immersed herself into a luxurious bubble bath and started to think about her husband's father and how little she knew him. She remembered how Peter hesitated in his father's presence, challenging him too and being turned aside too easily with good-natured ridicule, she found herself stupefied by Jacob's authority. She has always felt that she made a sorry impression, although Peter reassured her that his father had found her a "mighty pretty young thing". She frequently has wished that she meant a little more than this to Jacob, but a week after their second meeting, he had suddenly died of a heart attack.
    Her mind wandered lost in random thoughts, she knew, and had tried to remember what provoked these thoughts. She remembered the letter that Peter's mother recently received, inviting her to make a scientific expedition and it had an effect on everyone in the family. Maund became brute, yes. And Peter, he has been busier now, more intense, more nervours and more complaining about petty annoyances (it that was possible), above all, about the questionable wisdom of the trip. But Maud treated him as she has always treated him, with the infinite patience and affection of all mothers with their precocious little boys. Maud defended the solidity of the trip and had explained that the circumstances permitted no investigation and reminded him of her infallible ear for a good thing, the result of instinct as well as experience. As usual, once overruled, Peter retreated into the burden of extra work.

    Thank you very much
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    Re: correctness of a text - Syble

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