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    General writing about selling stuffs

    Could you please correct my writing below? I know when I write I make mistakes, but I can't know where mistakes are. Thank you very much.

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    Hi guys,

    I am selling 2 Unused/New Piece Copper Base Stainless Steel Pan Set.
    16 cm saucepan with lid.
    24 cm frying pan.
    It's fast to boil water and quickly hot your pans. Good quality.


    It cost me 32.99 when I bougt them as 3 piece. I only used the 18 saucepan.
    Now it only costs 12 to you with Unused/New 16 cm saucepan with lid and 24 cm frying pan.

    If you wish to have some second hand dishes or saucepan, I can free to give some of them to you.
    Please contact me via email. I will contact you ASAP and make the transcation go.

    ***(P.S. Should I use plural or singular of "Piece" and "Set"?)***


    Hi guys,

    I am selling a Bold 2in1 Gel Crystal Rain & White Lily 18 Washes 667ml.
    It's nice choice to clean up you clothes. It will keep a wonderful smell with all your clothes.
    The price in hight streets is 4.50. I am going to sell you as 3.

    If you want to buy it, please send me a email. I will contact with you shortly.
    Last edited by Supermonkey; 05-Jul-2011 at 19:04.

  2. emsr2d2's Avatar
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    Re: General writing about selling stuffs

    Quote Originally Posted by Supermonkey View Post
    Could you please correct my writing below? I know when I write I make mistakes, but I can't know where mistakes are. Thank you very much.

    ---



    Hi guys,

    I am selling 2 Unused/New Piece Copper Base Stainless Steel Pan Set.
    16 cm saucepan with lid.
    24 cm frying pan.
    It's fast to boil water and quickly hot your pans. Good quality.


    It cost me 32.99 when I bougt them as 3 piece. I only used the 18 saucepan.
    Now it only costs 12 to you with Unused/New 16 cm saucepan with lid and 24 cm frying pan.

    If you wish to have some second hand dishes or saucepan, I can free to give some of them to you.
    Please contact me via email. I will contact you ASAP and make the transcation go.

    ***(P.S. Should I use plural or singular of "Piece" and "Set"?)***


    Hi guys,

    I am selling a Bold 2in1 Gel Crystal Rain & White Lily 18 Washes 667ml.
    It's nice choice to clean up you clothes. It will keep a wonderful smell with all your clothes.
    The price in hight streets is 4.50. I am going to sell you as 3.

    If you want to buy it, please send me a email. I will contact with you shortly.
    Firstly, if you're composing an ad for eBay or something similar, you don't need to worry too much about full sentences. I would say:

    FOR SALE:
    2 Unused (New) Copper Base Stainless Steel Pans

    1 x 16cm saucepan with lid
    1 x 24 cm frying pan

    They both heat very fast so food cooks quickly.

    Originally part of a 3-piece set costing 33 but the 2 pans are on sale now for just 12.

    Second-hand dishes and saucepans also available free of charge. Please contact me for details.

    For either offer please contact me by email asap.

    Thank you.

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