Can anyone please help me rewrite the sentence below?
I don't know what the rule is when listing a series of names in sentences like the one below.
"The group consists of me, Kevin Holes, as a grouper leader, and Susan, my wife, Hanna, my daughter and Harry, my son."
The group consists of me (Kevin Holes, group leader), Susan (my wife), Hanna (my daughter) and Harry (my son).
or I would change the word order:
The group consists of me, Kevin Holes, as group leader, my wife Susan, my daughter Hanna and my son Harry.
Note that it's "group leader" not "a grouper leader". I assume that there are 4 people in the group, not five? It's a little ambiguous as it's not clear if you are Kevin Holes, the group leader or if the group consists of:
It can be read both ways.