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1. We refer to your authorised driverís Mr Koh David'ís email of 24 June 2011.
2. We refer to your authorised driver Mr Koh Davidís email of 24 June 2011.
I believe sentence 2 is correctly phrased. If it is not, how should I reword it?
We refer to the e-mail of your authorised driver, Mr Koh David, sent on 24 June 2011.
I'm not a teacher, but I write for a living. Please don't ask me about 2nd conditionals, but I'm a safe bet for what reads well in (American) English.