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    paraphrasing of one sentence 2

    Dear teachers,

    Would you be kind enough to give me your considered opinion concerning the paraphrasing of one sentence from an American short story?

    “In ten minutes” said Bill, “I shall cross the Central, Southern and Middle Western States, and be legging it trippingly for the Canadian border”.

    “In ten minutes” said Bill, “I can go through all of the Central States and be well up into Canada.”

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    I'm not sure what that author thinks is different about the central states and the Midwest, so combing those is okay, but you've omitted the South in your paraphrase.
    I'm not a teacher, but I write for a living. Please don't ask me about 2nd conditionals, but I'm a safe bet for what reads well in (American) English.

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    Re: paraphrasing of one sentence 2

    Hi Barb_D,

    Thank you for your kindness reading my clumsy writings.

    I'm not sure what that author thinks is different about the central states and the Midwest, so combing those is okay, but you've omitted the South in your paraphrase.

    I have omitted the South intentionally because, in my humble opinion, the mentioned below characters are situated in the very South of USA namely Alabama.

    It looked like a good thing: but wait till I tell you. We were down South, in Alabama--Bill Driscoll and myself-when this kidnapping idea struck us.

    It is obvious that in the present case are envisaged Tennessee, Kentucky, Indiana, Ohio and Michigan.

    Thank you again for your backing.

    V.
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    Re: paraphrasing of one sentence 2

    If you did already know that they were starting in the South, then your paraphrase is okay.
    I'm not a teacher, but I write for a living. Please don't ask me about 2nd conditionals, but I'm a safe bet for what reads well in (American) English.

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    Re: paraphrasing of one sentence 2

    In the first sentence Bill hasn't reached Canada. In the paraphrase he is well into it.

    So that can't be right.

    Rover

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    Re: paraphrasing of one sentence 2

    Quote Originally Posted by Barb_D View Post
    If you did already know that they were starting in the South, then your paraphrase is okay.
    Except that the original mentions the Southern states, and the paraphrase doesn't. The original does not mention all of the Central States; the paraphrase does.

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    Re: paraphrasing of one sentence 2

    Quote Originally Posted by Rover_KE View Post
    In the first sentence Bill hasn't reached Canada. In the paraphrase he is well into it.

    So that can't be right.

    Rover
    You are so right. Somehow I missed the "for the border" and read it as already being across the border.

    I still feel okay about the Southern state thing. You can't start in Alabama and cross Midwestern states without crossing other Southern states in the process, so it's implied.

    But I definitely blew it on where you are in relation to the Canadian border.
    I'm not a teacher, but I write for a living. Please don't ask me about 2nd conditionals, but I'm a safe bet for what reads well in (American) English.

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