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    dealing with redundancies

    "A quarter of the profit goes to the future of the company, a quarter to the stockholders, a quarter to the contribution to American society and finally a quarter to the employees of the company. "

    What are some good ways to phrase a sentence like this?

    Using "a quarter" over and over just doesn't seem natural.

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    Re: dealing with redundancies

    "A quarter of the profit goes to the future of the company, a quarter to the stockholders, a quarter to the contribution to American society and finally a quarter to the employees of the company. "

    You might say, "Profits are split four ways, with equal shares going to investments in growth, stockholder dividends, a contribution to American society, and the remainder distributed among the employees."

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    Re: dealing with redundancies

    I appreciate your suggestion but I was expecting minor changes to what I had, if possible, not the whole revamping of the sentence.

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    #5

    Re: dealing with redundancies

    J&K's solution is very similar to what I would have suggested.

    A bit closer to yours:

    Profits are divided into equal quarters: one quarter goes to A, one to B, one to C, and the last to D.
    I'm not a teacher, but I write for a living. Please don't ask me about 2nd conditionals, but I'm a safe bet for what reads well in (American) English.

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    Re: dealing with redundancies

    Quote Originally Posted by rainous View Post
    "A quarter of the profit goes to the future of the company, a quarter to the stockholders, a quarter to the contribution to American society and finally a quarter to the employees of the company. "

    What are some good ways to phrase a sentence like this?

    Using "a quarter" over and over just doesn't seem natural.

    Thanks
    One possibility: A quarter of the profit is distributed equally among the future of the company, the stockholders, American society and employees of the company.

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    Re: dealing with redundancies

    "A quarter of the profit goes to the future of the company, a quarter to the stockholders, a quarter to the contribution to American Society (I assume this is the name of the charity) and finally a quarter to the employees of the company. "

    Not really a problem repeating the word quarter, as it accurately reflects the distribution.

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