[Grammar] Plz check my essay re Retaining Wall Design

[mttting]

Could someone check my grammar and word structure? I have to admit this is quite technical. I really hope to understand what mistake I am making as my colleagues are commenting that my English writing is not fluent/smooth. SUPER MANY Thanks.

'I created a computer model to simulate the loading distribution to a proposed retaining wall. The wall is constructed using X office’s design. It is assumed that water pressure acts to the flood gate is resisted by reinforced concrete wall at its ends. These walls are expected to subject a large overturning moment. Therefore, piles are designed to distribute at 1.5m spacing at these position which has a closer distance than an uniform 3.0m spacing. '

 

[Josiah7]

i'm not very technical, but i do think that there is a section of your paragraph that could be improved in terms of grammatical structure.

"It is assumed that water pressure acts to the flood gate is resisted by reinforced concrete wall at its ends. These walls are expected to subject a large overturning moment. Therefore, piles are designed to distribute at 1.5m spacing at these position which has a closer distance than an uniform 3.0m spacing"

you could improve these sentences by making it as follows:

"It is assumed that the water pressure, acting to the flood gate, is resisted by reinforced concrete wall at its ends. These walls are likely to be subjected toa large overturning moment (momentum?). As a solution to the issue, (you can elaborate more on the issue here) piles are designed to be distributed at 1.5m spacing at these positions which ,in this case, is more appropriate than the typical uniform 3.0m spacing.

 

[Tdol]

You really should take technical documents to a specialist translator/proofreader who has experience in your area.

 

[mttting]

You really should take technical documents to a specialist translator/proofreader who has experience in your area.

I asked my colleagues to check my writing. But they simply don't have time to do this, I can only seek my way out in the dark. :-?

 

[mttting]

i'm not very technical, but i do think that there is a section of your paragraph that could be improved in terms of grammatical structure.

"It is assumed that water pressure acts to the flood gate is resisted by reinforced concrete wall at its ends. These walls are expected to subject a large overturning moment. Therefore, piles are designed to distribute at 1.5m spacing at these position which has a closer distance than an uniform 3.0m spacing"

you could improve these sentences by making it as follows:

"It is assumed that the water pressure, acting to the flood gate, is resisted by reinforced concrete wall at its ends. These walls are likely to be subjected toa large overturning moment (momentum?). As a solution to the issue, (you can elaborate more on the issue here) piles are designed to be distributed at 1.5m spacing at these positions which ,in this case, is more appropriate than the typical uniform 3.0m spacing.

Thanks. You make my sentence making sense. They are really good advice. I was commented that I didn't elaborate enough about my learning from a project. I tend to explain my learning as an action that I had done instead of explaning the critical thinking/decision that I made.

 

[tedtmc]

It is assumed that the water pressure, [STRIKE]acting to [/STRIKE] exerted/imposed on the flood gate, is resisted(held up) by a reinforced concrete wall at its ends.
end of the floodgate? is the r.c. wall all round or on three sides of the floodgate? Be more specific.

These walls are likely to be subjected to a large overturning moment.
Better not use 'likely' for something which is certain.

As a solution to the[STRIKE] issue[/STRIKE] problem, piles are designed to be distributed at 1.5m spacing at these positions which ,in this case, is more appropriate than the typical uniform 3.0m spacing.
Elaborate why the further spacing of piles is more appropriate.

loading distribution to a proposed retaining wall - load is imposed on a structure

What is x-office design? civil engineering software?

some suggestions (from someone with construction background)