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  1. Newbie
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    Help with adverbs in a tag line.

    Hi,

    Not being English native speaker I want your feedback on a tag-line for a personal blog about health focused on food, exercise and spirituality.

    "Eat clean, move freely, live consciously"

    Not sure about the "-ly".
    Is "Eat clean, move free, live consciously" better?
    "Eat cleanly" sounds wrong and seem to refer to table manners rather than what you eat.

    What do you think?

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    #2

    Re: Help with adverbs in a tag line.

    Stay with your original for these reasons:

    1. Your first instinct is usually your best.
    2. It's a personal blog, so should reflect your way of speaking, not necessarily some 'perfectly correct' grammar.
    3. I think it best expresses what you want to say. You're right that 'eating cleanly' sounds like you just want people to be tidy, and 'move free' sounds more like a statement on Human Rights than about exercise.

    Keep it simple and make it your own voice, your own words- go for it!

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    #3

    Re: Help with adverbs in a tag line.

    While I agree that it's yours and you need to use the words and voice that work for you "eat clean" and "eat cleanly" both sound odd to me. I do eat in a clean environment. I wash my food. To tell me to "eat clean[ly]" is very odd. It's so odd that it interrupts my reading of the rest of what you have.

    Do you mean "eat well"?
    I'm not a teacher, but I write for a living. Please don't ask me about 2nd conditionals, but I'm a safe bet for what reads well in (American) English.

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    #4

    Re: Help with adverbs in a tag line.

    Quote Originally Posted by craiglee View Post
    Hi,

    Not being English native speaker I want your feedback on a tag-line for a personal blog about health focused on food, exercise and spirituality.

    "Eat clean, move freely, live consciously"

    Not sure about the "-ly".
    Is "Eat clean, move free, live consciously" better?
    "Eat cleanly" sounds wrong and seem to refer to table manners rather than what you eat.

    What do you think?

    ***** NOT A TEACHER *****


    (1) You say that you want some tag lines for a blog devoted to

    food, exercise, and spirituality.

    (2) I most respectfully suggest that tag lines should be snappy (short and

    to the point).

    (a) I believe that many Americans prefer adjectives, not adverbs (and certainly

    not -ly adverbs), for tag lines.

    (3) Here are some tag lines used in the States:

    Eat smart.

    Keep fit.

    Think positive.

  3. Newbie
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    #5

    Re: Help with adverbs in a tag line.

    Thanks for the input!
    I'll go with my original tag-line.

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