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The most popular social networking website, Facebook was founded in February 2004 by Mark Zuckerberg and his Harvard roommates: Dustin Moskovitz, Chis Hughes and Eduardo Saverin.

At the beginning Facebook was only offered to Harvard students. Then, in short time, it expanded to Stanford, Columbia, Yale and many other universities across the United States and Canada. Finally, in September 2006, it was made available to general populations. Later, rapidly, Facebook platform was launched in 2007 and in the same year, Facebook worked together with Microsoft. By 2008, it connected a service that allowed people to sign in easily. Since then, Facebook has become the largest social networking site in the world, surpassing My Space in April 2008 and beating Google by August 2010, the year that it had more than 500,000,000 users and “The Social Network”, the film about real story from fouders of Facebook
-an indictment between Mark Zuckerberg and his Facebook’s founder-friends was made. Today, Facebook is the largest networking site and bring a lot of money to Zuckerberg that he never expected it before.
To conclusion, from Zuckerberg’s tale, everything can happen like him that became a millionaire in his young age but, one day, he was sued that stole code for making Facebook.
 

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The most popular social networking website, Facebook was founded in February 2004 by Mark Zuckerberg and his Harvard roommates: Dustin Moskovitz, Chis Hughes and Eduardo Saverin.

At the beginning Facebook was only offered to Harvard students. Then, in short time, it expanded to Stanford, Columbia, Yale and many other universities across the United States and Canada. Finally, in September 2006, it was made available to general population. Later, rapidly, Facebook platform was launched in 2007 and in the same year, Facebook worked together with Microsoft. By 2008, it connected a service that allowed people to sign in easily. Since then, Facebook has become the largest social networking site in the world, surpassing My Space in April 2008 and beating Google by August 2010, the year when it had more than 500,000,000 users and when “The Social Network”, the film about the real story of founders of Facebook -an indictment between Mark Zuckerberg and his Facebook’s founder-friends was made. Today, Facebook is the largest networking site and brings a lot of money to Zuckerberg that he would never have expected [STRIKE]it[/STRIKE] before.
To conclusion, Zuckerbergs's tale [STRIKE]everything[/STRIKE] can happen to everybody, namely the story that he became a millionaire at a young age but, one day, he was sued for having stolen code for making his Facebook.

Beim letzten Satz bin ich nicht sicher "stolen code" - a code? codes?
 
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thank you very very much,februar
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