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    Can give me some comments plz

    Tabacco advertisement encourage smoking?

    It’s important for a company to create an eye-catching and a memorable advertisement to the customers. However, it might not be a good idea for this type of business – tabacco. A recent research citied a survey showing that tobacco stands in shops are likely to encourage youngsters to start smoking in the future.

    Tabacco displays will increase teenagers’ levels of interest towards cigarette. When they walk in shops or supermarkets, it advertises that cigarettes are not sold to adults. Because of their curiosity, they would likely to buy a pack of cigarette easily once they grow up. Worse still, youngsters might act contrary to law taking up bad habit.

    * What did i miss out ??
    * Any comment on my short writing??
    * how to improve better ??

    Many Thanks

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    Re: Can give me some comments plz

    Quote Originally Posted by annayuk View Post
    Tabacco advertisement encourage smoking?

    It’s important for a company to create an eye-catching and a memorable advertisement to the to attract potential customers. However, it might not be a good idea for this type of business – tobacco. A recent research citied a survey showing that tobacco stands displays in shops are likely to encourage youngsters to start smoking in the future.

    Tabacco displays will increase teenagers’ levels of interest towards in cigarettes. When they walk in shops or supermarkets, it advertises they see that cigarettes are not sold to adults minors. Because of their curiosity, they would likely try to buy a pack of cigarette easily once they grow up or sooner. Worse still, youngsters might act contrary to law taking up a bad habit.

    * What did I miss out ?? See suggestions.
    * Any comment on my short writing?? "B"
    * How to improve better ?? See above.

    Many Thanks
    b.

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