taviamichcharm
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- Sep 8, 2011
- Member Type
- Student or Learner
- Native Language
- Vietnamese
- Home Country
- Vietnam
- Current Location
- Vietnam
Hello. I am a Toefl IBT beginner. Here are some short paragraphs I wrote. But I think there are some details may seem awkward. Please help me check the grammar and writing in each paragraph. Thank you so much.
1. A useful skill my father taught me is managing my time. He taught me this skill by asking me to plan my week and supervising my effectuation when I was a teenager. From this, I learned how to use my time profitably. I also had much more time to relax and do my hobbies. Today, I use this skill all the time especially when I am busy working. In this way, I will never get stressed or lack of time to do anything.
2. In high school, I spent my free time to join the music club. I think this was a positive way to spend my free time. For example, one thing I did was to rehearse for performances. I did this because I love music and singing. Another thing I did was to design almost costumes we used on stage. I did this because I want to help my club to save money from buying new costumes. Spending my free time to join music club in high school was a good experience for me.
3. One difficult experience that I went through was to give a presentation. I experienced this when I went to the university. I was difficult because I had to speak in front of public for the first time. That meant I must overcome the fear of public speaking and try my best to speak confidently as much as possible. From this experience I learned how to give a good presentation by myself. Now I know that I can do anything If I try.
4. One person I admire is my uncle. I admire him because of his intelligence and devotion. He is a teacher in high school. He has worked hard to communicate all his knowledge to his students. Even though he does not like to promote in his career, he has show me how important it is to set a goal to gain in my work.
5. One dangerous sport that I would like to try is scuba diving. This sport looks like it would be a lot of interesting. In order to try this sport, you have to be fearless and accept the risks. I want to see if I can overcome myself and how much my brave is. I also think that it is great to see clearly and touch by myself some ocean creatures I have never seen.
I don't want to try any dangerous or extreme sports. One reason I do not want to try them is because I am not a brave person. I always take care of myself carefully so I do not want to be injured or even died. Another reason I do not want to try any extreme sports id because it costs a lot of money. I am not rich, so I do not want to waste my money on it.
1. A useful skill my father taught me is managing my time. He taught me this skill by asking me to plan my week and supervising my effectuation when I was a teenager. From this, I learned how to use my time profitably. I also had much more time to relax and do my hobbies. Today, I use this skill all the time especially when I am busy working. In this way, I will never get stressed or lack of time to do anything.
2. In high school, I spent my free time to join the music club. I think this was a positive way to spend my free time. For example, one thing I did was to rehearse for performances. I did this because I love music and singing. Another thing I did was to design almost costumes we used on stage. I did this because I want to help my club to save money from buying new costumes. Spending my free time to join music club in high school was a good experience for me.
3. One difficult experience that I went through was to give a presentation. I experienced this when I went to the university. I was difficult because I had to speak in front of public for the first time. That meant I must overcome the fear of public speaking and try my best to speak confidently as much as possible. From this experience I learned how to give a good presentation by myself. Now I know that I can do anything If I try.
4. One person I admire is my uncle. I admire him because of his intelligence and devotion. He is a teacher in high school. He has worked hard to communicate all his knowledge to his students. Even though he does not like to promote in his career, he has show me how important it is to set a goal to gain in my work.
5. One dangerous sport that I would like to try is scuba diving. This sport looks like it would be a lot of interesting. In order to try this sport, you have to be fearless and accept the risks. I want to see if I can overcome myself and how much my brave is. I also think that it is great to see clearly and touch by myself some ocean creatures I have never seen.
I don't want to try any dangerous or extreme sports. One reason I do not want to try them is because I am not a brave person. I always take care of myself carefully so I do not want to be injured or even died. Another reason I do not want to try any extreme sports id because it costs a lot of money. I am not rich, so I do not want to waste my money on it.