Student or Learner
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This is the task:
This report aims to outline the beneficial side of the Careers Conference and to give advice for further improvements.
What the majority of the students were extremely pleased with was the captivating and advantageous exhibition which gave them a great opportunity to explore more than 100 different jobs.
Some of the talking was well-organised and included a vast variety of careers. However, it is believed that not all of the talks provided the learners with enough information they needed.
It is advisable to involve more data related to the professions.
The experts’ advice
This part appeared to be quite useful because most students had a lot of questions and they could actually receive the information they were interested in. Unfortunately, the specialists were few and due to this they couldn’t answered to everybody. This is why it will be better if their number is increased.
Despite the splendid work of the experts and the beneficial exhibition, most students were of the opinion that this conference was more favourable to the science scholars than to the humanities. For this reason the addition of language and history area is highly recommended.
In conclusion, Careers Conference was up to standard, but if the recommendations are considered, I am sure next time it will have a thriving success.
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