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    English paper: Academic Goals

    I AM NOT A TEACHER.

    I am in need of help in writing am English paper for class. The essay question is: What are you academic goals? I have been given strategies to write a paper but I am struggling to form sentences to write. My first sentence of my paper is: "The Web Designing field is one of the most exciting career choices one can consider that can lead to many rewarding employment opportunities. I have always been passionate and fascinated regarding the international high growth entrepreneurial and striving enterprise sectors."

    I am really hoping someone can help. Thank you so much.

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    Re: English paper: Academic Goals

    Hello Marie, and welcome to Using English.


    Your two sentences are completely unrelated to each other.

    Also your first sentence uses the impersonal " one" but it's supposed to be about you want.

    Don't try to write such long and complicated sentences. Start by simply saying what your goal is (or goals are).
    Last edited by Barb_D; 24-Sep-2011 at 19:27.
    I'm not a teacher, but I write for a living. Please don't ask me about 2nd conditionals, but I'm a safe bet for what reads well in (American) English.

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