English paper: Academic Goals

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MarieKiara

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I AM NOT A TEACHER.

I am in need of help in writing am English paper for class. The essay question is: What are you academic goals? I have been given strategies to write a paper but I am struggling to form sentences to write. My first sentence of my paper is: "The Web Designing field is one of the most exciting career choices one can consider that can lead to many rewarding employment opportunities. I have always been passionate and fascinated regarding the international high growth entrepreneurial and striving enterprise sectors."

I am really hoping someone can help. Thank you so much.
 

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Hello Marie, and welcome to Using English.


Your two sentences are completely unrelated to each other.

Also your first sentence uses the impersonal " one" but it's supposed to be about you want.

Don't try to write such long and complicated sentences. Start by simply saying what your goal is (or goals are).
 
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