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    After + Being

    Officer Russel Donrough got seriously injured after being shot twice in the face in the early morning hours of July 9.

    Is it

    Officer Russel Donrough got seriously injured after he was shot twice in the face in the early morning hours of July 9.

    or

    Officer Russel Donrough got seriously injured after he had been shot twice in the face in the early morning hours of July 9.

    How would you rewrite it?

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    Re: After + Being

    Either re-write is possible, but all three sound a little strange. I would imagine that the shots caused the injury. As they stand, the sentences suggest he was seriously injured after he was shot.

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    Re: After + Being

    Quote Originally Posted by Volcano1985 View Post
    Officer Russel Donrough got seriously injured after being shot twice in the face in the early morning hours of July 9.

    Is it

    Officer Russel Donrough got seriously injured after he was shot twice in the face in the early morning hours of July 9.

    or

    Officer Russel Donrough got seriously injured after he had been shot twice in the face in the early morning hours of July 9.

    How would you rewrite it?
    I agree with 5jj (again!) He didn't get seriously injured after he was shot. He got seriously injured by being shot in the face.

    It would make more sense if it said something like "Officer Donrough is seriously ill in hospital after being shot twice in the face".

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    Quote Originally Posted by emsr2d2 View Post
    I agree with 5jj (again!) He didn't get seriously injured after he was shot. He got seriously injured by being shot in the face.

    It would make more sense if it said something like "Officer Donrough is seriously ill in hospital after being shot twice in the face".
    It could have been for the second bullet that hit him.

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    Quote Originally Posted by ostap77 View Post
    It could have been for the second bullet that hit him.
    Do you mean that the first bullet that hit him in the face didn't injure him?!

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    Quote Originally Posted by emsr2d2 View Post
    Do you mean that the first bullet that hit him in the face didn't injure him?!
    Yes. He might have taken the first bullet to his mandible and second caused a severe brain injury that was more serious in comperison to the first injury.
    Last edited by ostap77; 01-Oct-2011 at 18:41.

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    Quote Originally Posted by ostap77 View Post
    Yes. First shot didn't hit the target.
    "after being shot twice in the face".

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    Provided only two shots were fired, if the first shot hadn't hit its target, he would only have been shot once in the face.

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    Quote Originally Posted by emsr2d2 View Post
    Provided only two shots were fired, if the first shot hadn't hit its target, he would only have been shot once in the face.
    I wasn't done writing my post when you sent yours. Two different injuries.

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    Quote Originally Posted by ostap77 View Post
    I wasn't done writing my post when you sent yours. Two different injuries.
    I am leaving you to it. There are probably people with reasonable questions waiting for a response.

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