[Grammar] Could any native speaker of Engilsh please edit my passage?

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Ever Student

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Would you prefer to go the opera or to the football game?
(a speaking passage, you have only 30 seconds for speaking)


There are two reasons that I would prefer to go to the opera. One reason is that the opera atmosphere is very quiet and I feel comfortable there. There are not noises but the singer's sound and the harmony of music. Another reason is that I think it's worth to go for an art rather than for a game.


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buggles

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Would you prefer to go the opera or to the football game?
(a speaking passage, you have only 30 seconds for speaking)


There are two reasons why I would prefer to go to the opera. One reason is that the atmosphere at the opera is very quiet and I feel comfortable there. There is no noise except the sound of the singer and the harmony of the music. Another reason is that I think it's more worth going out to an art event than to a game.


Thanks in advance

This the personal view of a native speaker.
 

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Many thanks for your help. I have learned a lot.
 

buggles

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I don't understand why we can't use "the singer's sound"?


I can't give you any special reason. It's just that "the singer's sound" wouldn't be used by a native speaker, but "the sound of the singer" would. I know they have the same meaning, but the second version just sounds better.

They might say, "the singer's voice", but not "the singer's sound".
 
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