[Essay] Please check my concert description.

[katue_]

Hello,
As you know, I'm preparing for the FCE exam on my own. So I need some help with my writing, again. Could you please be kind enough to check this concert description.
Thanks a lot,
Katherine.

A concert description.

Last week I went to a concert performed by the British band called ‘Garbage’. I thought Shirley Manson, the leader of the band, sang brilliantly and was dressed very fashionably. The concert was excellent although music was too loud sometimes. I liked all the song, they were wonderful. It was one of the best concerts I have ever been to!
The concert took place at the ‘Luzhniki’ concert hall. It started on time and lasted for two hours. The band played some good old songs and a lot of new ones. They even played a song written by Shirley Manson that nobody has ever heard before. It was called ‘Pretty Horses’. I was so excited! The audience applauded very enthusiastically when the song ended. The song is about little girl’s memories and is very moving. But I won’t tell you the lyrics. You have to go to the Garbage concert to hear it yourself!

 

[februar]

Hello,
As you know, I'm preparing for the FCE exam on my own. So I need some help with my writing, again. Could you please be kind enough to check this concert description?
Thanks a lot,
Katherine.

A concert description.

Last week I went to a concert performed by the British band called ‘Garbage’. I found Shirley Manson, the leader of the band, sang brilliantly and was dressed very fashionably. The concert was excellent although the music was too loud sometimes. I liked all his / their songs, they were wonderful. It was one of the best concerts I have ever been to!
The concert took place at the ‘Luzhniki’ concert hall. It started on time and lasted for two hours. The band played some good old songs and a lot of new ones. They even played a song written by Shirley Manson that nobody has ever heard before. It was called ‘Pretty Horses’. I was so excited! The audience applauded very enthusiastically when the song ended. The song is about little girl’s memories and is very moving. But I won’t tell you the lyrics. You must go to the Garbage concert to hear it yourself!

 

[Raymott]

I don't understand why "the" is unacceptable?

It is acceptable. It's correct.
But you must write: "I liked all the songs; they were wonderful." or "I liked all the songs. They were wonderful." You can't join two sentences with a comma in English.

 

[februar]

I don't understand why "the" is unacceptable?

I should have mentioned it: The green colour means that your version is acceptable but you can change it, if you find it better

The red colour shows, what is not correct.

Raymott's answer is correct.

 

[Raymott]

I should have mentioned it: The green colour means that your version is acceptable but you can change it, if you find it better

The red colour shows, what is not correct.
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Well, that's all very intuitive! ;-)

 

[februar]

I'm sorry but I still don't understand. Because "I liked all his / their songs, they were wonderful" are two sentences, and they are joined with a comma.

Sorry, the comma is not correct but a semicolon ( as Raymott mentioned or a full stop if you make two sentences.

My thought was that you could choose from three possibilities:

I liked all the songs; they were wonderful.
I liked all the songs. They were wonderful.

I liked all his songs; they were wonderful. (If he sang only)
I liked all his songs. They were wonderful.

I liked all their songs; they were wonderful. (If the whole group sang)
I liked all their songs. They were wonderful.

But at the end I would choose your and Raymott's version because it's clear that you mean the songs he sang or maybe the whole group sang in this concert.