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My essay is about the comparison between married life and single life.

Introduction

Married life and single life are both alike and different. There are many reason to get married as well as many reason not to ger married, and there are several differences between married people and those who are still single such as responsibility and time management.

Firstly, married people are different from a person who still single. In there life they have different responsibility. for those who remain single , they do not have to devide their loves to a partner, and they never face any difficulty in their life, , moeover they do not take care of a family. In contrast , married people have tough in their responsibility towards their family and their children.

secondly, time management is an important part of differences between married people and single people. A married people must manage their time for their family ,they have to spend their free times with their family especially with their children. Beside that, people who still single do not have a very full schedul , hense they can enjoy their free times with their friends and spend their money all by themselves.

to conclude, either married or single , both of them have their own specialty. so,both have the own specialty on their responsibilty and time management. So , it is up to every one to choose their own way of life.

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My essay is about the comparison between married life and single life.

Introduction

Married life and single life are both alike and different. There are many reasons to get married as well as many reasons not to get married, and there are several differences between married people and those who are still single such as responsibility and time management.

Firstly, married people are different from a person who is still single. In their lives they have different responsibilities. [STRIKE]For[/STRIKE]Those who remain single, do not have to (divide) share their loves with a partner, and they never face any difficulty in their lives, moreover, they have not to take care of a family. In contrast, married people have a great responsibility towards their family and their children.

Secondly, time management is an important part of differences between married people and single people. A married person (people is the plural of person) must manage their time for their family, they have to spend their free time with their family especially with their children. Besides that, people who are still single do not have a tight schedule hence they can enjoy their free time with their friends and spend their money all on themselves.

To conclude, both married couples and single persons [STRIKE]both of them[/STRIKE] have their own lifestyle, mainly in relation to [STRIKE]so, both have the own specialty on [/STRIKE]their responsibility and time management. So, it is up to every individual to choose their own way of life.

Please look grammar, sentence structure, and language.

thank you so much

Next time please, write a title related to the text, for example: comparison between married life and single life.

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