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  1. rainous's Avatar
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    #1

    rather than

    Hi. I am trying to combine the following two ideas.

    1. Our colleges should have been an ivory tower that encourage students to pursue their studies.

    Instead,

    2. Our colleges have been an ivory tower that reacts sensitively to political changes.


    And this is what I have come up with so far to the best of my ability.

    My main focus has been trying to avoid using "an ivory tower" twice. BUT I am not sure whether it is grammatically correct.

    "Our colleges have been an ivory tower that reacts sensitively to political changes
    rather than allowing students to pursue their studies."


    Is it grammatically correct? And does "allowing students to pursue their studies" have "an ivory tower", not "Our colleges", as its subject ?
    Thanks
    Last edited by rainous; 24-Oct-2011 at 03:20.

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    #2

    Re: rather than

    Are you really sure that you want to use 'ivory tower'?

    Ivory Tower - Wikipedia, the free encyclopedia

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    #3

    Re: rather than

    Quote Originally Posted by fivejedjon View Post
    Are you really sure that you want to use 'ivory tower'?

    Ivory Tower - Wikipedia, the free encyclopedia
    Are you implying that the term "ivory tower" is almost always used pejoratively (which I am aware of), which is why it wouldn't make sense in the sentence?

    IF it could be used in a non-pejorative way, would my sentence make sense?
    Last edited by rainous; 24-Oct-2011 at 08:40.

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    #4

    Re: rather than

    I see little point in considering whether sentences would make sense if the words in them meant something different.
    Last edited by 5jj; 24-Oct-2011 at 09:10. Reason: typo

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