What you wrote is fine, apart from a few typos. I changed it a little to make it sound more natural to me.Could anyone help me revise the first paragraph in my essay? Maybe change some inappropriate usage or some wordy sentences. Thank you!!
My intense desire to become an EFL teacher developed during my personal experience of being taught English at a top urban school, and later teaching English, when I would give free English lessons to students from underprivileged families. As a successful language learner and assistant to my English teacher throughout my middle school years, it has become my habit to help others with their English. Majoring in English education in college, I took every chance to demonstrate that I can teach English in a unique way. This is where I found my calling-- never before has one field of study demanded the full scope of my talents and abilities like teaching English. I also discovered that ESL teaching is a challenging career, requiring extensive problem solving, which also holds a particular fascination for me.
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