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gozuhair

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Hi All
could you please see the below letter and make necessary correction. Thanks

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 Hi abc 
With reference to the below email, I applied as a Customer Service Technician at Abc 6 months back, I cleared all my  test and interview but unfortunately I ddn’t attend my last  interview with the hiring manager but I already informed you, the reason for writing this email is that I have seen a job posting at your site for the position of Customer service, can I apply for this job or not? Thanks
 

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Use puncuation.
Be more polite
 

gozuhair

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Thanks for the reply,but how can i become more polite and use pronunciation, I have no idea.
 

gozuhair

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Hi all
I really apprecite if someone help me to improve the above mentioned letter because I have to submit it as soon as possible.
 

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