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vectra

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Hello,

I am not sure about 'criminal intrusion' in the memo sent by a student:

'In order to prevent criminal intrusion do not leave your office unattended. When you leave your office, you should lock it.'

Maybe we should say 'in order to prevent office break-ins' or 'in order to prevent stealing things from offices'?

Could you share your ideas please?

Thank you in advance.
 

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Maybe we should say 'in order to prevent office break-ins' or 'in order to prevent [STRIKE]stealing[/STRIKE] things being stolen from offices'?
Your student's version is not natural English.

Your first suggestion is fine, except that if the office is unlocked, we can't really refer to a break-in. I think I'd go for something brief, such as 'Prevent theft.' You may well get better suggestions.
 

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Please lock your office doors in order to deter theft.
 
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