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    Grammar related

    Is the following sentence alright or it needs improvement?

    My eldest brotherís education began at the Indian school nearby where he was the only Christian student in his class as he was in his neighborhood (meaning he was also the only Christian boy in the neighborhood where he lived with his family).

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    Re: Grammar related

    My eldest brotherís education began at the Indian school nearby where he was the only Christian student in his class as he was in his neighborhood (meaning he was also the only Christian boy in the neighborhood where he lived with his family).

    I think editing this will be easier if you reorder things from most general to most specific.

    My eldest brother's education began at the indian school nearby. He was the only Christian boy in the neighborhood and the only Christian student in his class.

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    Re: Grammar related

    Thank you.

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