Could anyone tell me how these two sentences read, especially with regard to the underlined phrases?
1. From the early years of the marriage, he verbally insulted me whenever he came home drunk, and the frequency and the degree of his violent behaviors grew day by day.
Is "From early in the marriage" fine as an alternative? And Would "increased" be better than "grew"?
Does "day by day" make sense in the context? Any other alternative suggestions will be greatly appreciated.
2. It was the marriage my parents initially opposed so I didn’t have the heart to tell them how nightmarish the marriage had become and had to pretend happiness.
I was thinking it might sound better if I could find some kind of noun that conveys the meaning of a "wrecked marriage" which I have failed to find so far. As a possible alternative, I have "what a train wreck the marriage had become" as a reserve but I don't know how that might sound once I replace it.
"and had to pretend happiness" - does the phrase sound alright?
Last edited by rainous; 12-Dec-2011 at 08:24.